1. Who was/were involved in the story?
➤ Myself, my friend, the thief and the police.
2. What happened?
➤ My wallet was stolen by the theif.
3. When did the story happen?
➤ Last july 25, 2015.
4. Where did the story happen?
➤ At Sanamchan palace and the police station Nakhon Pathom.
5. How did it happen?
➤ I went to exercise with my friend.
➤ I kept my wallet under seat of motorcycle.
➤ My wallet was stolen by the thief.
➤ I report my wallet stolen at the police station.
6. How did the story end?
➤ I report my wallet stolen at the police station Nakhon Pathom.
A bad experience in my life
The sad experience I will never forget was happened last July 25, 2015, When I went to exercise with my friend at Sanamchan palace. Before I went to exercise, I kept my wallet under the seat of motorcycle. My wallet contained my student ID, ATM card and a couple thousand baht. When I came back to the motorcycle, I found my wallet has been stolen so I was very sadness and I started to cries. After that my friend and I went to police station Nakhon Pathom and I report my wallet was stolen. I was deep in sorrow for a long time. Since then, I'm very careful when I carries the wallet with me. Let this be a lesson to everyone and be careful when you keep the wallet.
Hello, it's me. You should to use this sentence "I was very sad" instead to "I was very sadness". Ok, your story is good. I'm sorry about your stolen wallet. However, you have a little point that wrong. I will give you 8.3/10.
ตอบลบThe story is good. I will give you 8 point.
ตอบลบIt's a sad story. I wish you all the best in the future.I give you 9. good bye.
ตอบลบYour story is well-organized and good contents, but the grammar in some sentences are not exactly correct, such as, " I found my wallet has been stolen so I was very sadness and I started to cries", "so" should have a comma in front of it, "I was very sadness", should be "I was very sad", and "I started to cries" should be "I started to cry"
ตอบลบSo, for this story, I'll give you 8/10
I remember that at that time you were very sad, I hope it will not happen to you again.
ตอบลบYour story is well organized. But you have a little mistake at some point about grammar. So I give you 8.5 points.